Friday 23 October 2020

A moment in time in the swimming pool

WALT:  Use punctuation correctly and write in first person 

I was so exited about going to my favourite swimming  pool in the world. When I got there my heart was beating as fast as a super car. I leaped into the pools and swam to the hydro slide with my special wristband. When I was there I lined up in the line. When it was my turn I got my floaty. I ran up the stairs hoping I wouldn't trip and wouldn't hurt myself. The lucky thing was I didn't trip! I got to the top of the building. I got in my floaty and as soon as the  light went green I zoomed down the slide. I saw nothing but darkness! I had a big smile on my face I was going backwards so I couldn't see the light but when I got out I could smell pies from the cafe. I could touch the cold water. My hands were getting wrinkly and I hate that so I got out. My day was the best day ever!

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1 comment:

  1. Anonymous3 November 2020 at 13:50

    hi angus This is a good job angus and maybe put a pull stop and Capital letter on the beginning of a new sentence

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